My Digital Production Final, 8 weeks early. Take a listen.

[VanillaGorilla]

Keep in mind the announcing was recorded on my laptops built in speaker, it will sound way better when it is one in the studio. I also have a terrible head cold, which doesn't help things. All I know is that one of our finals is we need to put together a concert promotion spot, so I did one of my own here. Take a listen, if you will, and tell me what you think.

Go here (http://home.mchsi.com/%7Ehambonejackson/Concert_promo_Demo.mp3)

[Demolition Man]

First!

[VanillaGorilla]

First!Are you implying that this thread will soon be filled with flaming, namecalling, and "VG, you suck!" posts?

[cochesecochese]

You even have an annoying voice.

This sounds like you're phoning it in for a used car auction. Speak up and speak more forcefully.

[Demolition Man]

Are you implying that this thread will soon be filled with flaming, namecalling, and "VG, you suck!" posts?

Maybe. ;)

I just listened to it.

A) There are several really noticeable pauses in the audio between a few of the song clips.

B) Your volume levels are very inconsistant. One clip is very loud, the next is quiet.

[fart_bubble]

VG and Demo Man in the same thread is all sorts of fail

[Demolition Man]

VG and Demo Man in the same thread is all sorts of fail

Fixed.

[Soodmeg]

Dude.

When I was in school I majored in Digital media/Television and Radio Broadcasting. I now work solely in television though...but it hasn't been so long that I have forgotten everything I learned.

Though the concert promo that I made wasnt a final (we made 2 or 3 of them a week) I remember making these all the time.

Let me put this nicely.

That shit sucked......hard. If you had the Teachers I had you would fail hardcore.

What audio editing are you using? Abode audition I hope.

1. Your background track is to loud. Start it off loud but when you start talking soften it up. You can barely tell what you are even saying at the beginning.

2. Speak the hell up. Your are being drowned out by the song in the background. You should still be able to reguardless of a cold.

3. Can you be more lame while speaking? Add some excitement to your voice. This is a promo.....promote. You are just speaking. No one would ever show up to that.

4. Your editing needs a lot of work. The background songs are suppose to fade seamlessly into one and another. Not drop out for 2 seconds and cut in with a different song.

5. Your editing needs a LOT of work. God does it need work. You butcher every single one of those. Seamless man. Its suppose to flow seamless. You cut in and out like you are just pressing track skip to get to the next song.

6.Your tracks are at different volumes for some reason. You can tell that one is louder than another.

7. Seriously....you couldnt get a baby excited with the way you are speaking.

All in all. In my humble opinion. I wouldnt turn that in if you cared about your grade. Not to be a dick but there is just a lot of things wrong in that. And hell you wanted feedback so I gave it to you. Better than just making fun of you for no reason.

What school do you go to that you are at a final but producing things like a 5th grade project?

[Greetard]

It sounds like you are speaking through your nose/have an excessive amount of phlegm in the back of your throat.

This is funny to me.

For the go-to-asshole-douchebag-that-he-so-desperately-attempts-to-make-himself-out-to-be to actually have the phlegmy, scratchy, and generally puny-ass voice that I was just subjected to, and still legitimately try to be that guy is hilarious. In many ways.

[Illini Jeeper]

Working in radio, I'll have to agree with some of the criticisms here. The first band clip you're introducing is too loud for the background it came from. You can also "feel" the separation and choppy-ness between the clips. To go with that, the clip all sounded "the same" and I don't mean that in a positive way. It was just constant rock with some muffled talking every few seconds.

Also, your script is very awkward. I think it goes something like this (?) "It's the 2008 Occult Leads Tour. It's happening at the Nuke (Is it nuke or myth or mint? Your intonation changes by the end of the spot) Nightclub in downtown Minneapolis on April 22nd and it's featuring Alkaline Trio...with special guest the Draft... also appearing the Gaslight Anthem...etc etc." I'm confused by the end of it.

Your intonation of your voice and your breathing changes with that second sentence especially. I essentially hear two sentences instead of one. "It's happening at the Nuke Nightclub in downtown Minneapolis. On April 22nd and it's featuring Alkaline Trio..." When you read that as I wrote it, it doesn't sound right, yet that's the way it's coming across.

There is also an overuse of "it's" in the first bit. "It's the... it's happening... it's featuring." It sounds awkward. And you rattle off the phone number way to quickly.

This is my way to improve the writing.

"The 2008 Occult Leads tour is coming to the Mint Nightclub in downtown Minneapolis on April 22nd, featuring Alkaline Trio.... the Gaslight Anthem... and special guest The Draft. Tickets now available at (phone number). It's the Occult Leads tour only at the Mint Nightclub."

This is in no way bashing you or anything, but trying to help you create better product. I hope that you will post a redone version of this at a later time so we can hopefully hear the changes for the better.

[xmrblondex]

and boom goes the dynamite

but yeah, it needs a little work with the timing of clips coming in and out.

[Rig]

You need to speak up. It was hard to hear what you were saying (mainly in the beginning and end).

Needs a bit more emotion, and your background music should flow better than that.

Of course, these were all already mentioned, but it seems they would be the most important things to work on.

This coming from a guy that has no radio/TV experience like some of those above posters.

[Maklershed]

and boom goes the dynamite
I loled. :lol:

Ahh, references.

[Brak]

I work at a radio station, like you, VG... and I gotta say: That was pretty bayud.

[VanillaGorilla]

It sounds like you are speaking through your nose/have an excessive amount of phlegm in the back of your throat.

This is funny to me.

For the go-to-asshole-douchebag-that-he-so-desperately-attempts-to-make-himself-out-to-be to actually have the phlegmy, scratchy, and generally puny-ass voice that I was just subjected to, and still legitimately try to be that guy is hilarious. In many ways.Did you not read the OP, where I state "I also have a terrible head cold".

And for all the people who are ripping it, keep in mind that it is only a demo, a rough outline. It was something I put together last night because I was bored.

[Soodmeg]

Did you not read the OP, where I state "I also have a terrible head cold".

And for all the people who are ripping it, keep in mind that it is only a demo, a rough outline. It was something I put together last night because I was bored.


Why do people ask for feedback and then bitch when they get it?


Whether or not it was something you put together when you were "bored" doesnt change the fact that it was really bad.

Instead of making excuses just fix the problems you have. That or never ask people to judge your work if you can not handle anything other than sunshine blown up your ass.

[keithp]

VG, you suck!

[VanillaGorilla]

Why do people ask for feedback and then bitch when they get it?


Whether or not it was something you put together when you were "bored" doesnt change the fact that it was really bad.

Instead of making excuses just fix the problems you have. That or never ask people to judge your work if you can not handle anything other than sunshine blown up your ass.Because someone said I was "speaking through your nose/have an excessive amount of phlegm in the back of your throat." and it sounded that way because I had a cold, dumbass. I wasn't bitching about any of the criticism, but rather, explaining why it sounded the way it did. And if I couldn't handle anything other than "sunshine blown up (my) ass", I would have quit posting a year ago, since it's pretty obvious a lot of people here still dislike me for some reason.

[Brak]

VG, you suck!
That made el oh el for some reason.

[cochesecochese]

VG, you suck!

how do you think he got the sore throat to begin with?