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defender
10-21-2004, 02:37 PM
Felt in the mood to write something. A bit dark but what the hell..it's my current mood.
One last time by Jesse Labrocca
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When you start to feel the rotting of your mind
And it is the flesh that is consuming you.
When you begin to hear your heart beat out of step.
And it is your breathe that is ending you.
When you open your eyes and see the black.
And it is the day you do not see.
When you fall to the ground one last time.
And it is the earth you forever see.
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Scorch
10-21-2004, 02:39 PM
breath*
sounds like someone fell in the blue hell in GTA :P
Pylis
10-21-2004, 02:46 PM
That.... that was beautiful.
I want to have your baby.
Wshakspear
10-21-2004, 02:57 PM
One last time by Jesse Labrocca
OR The Ballad of George A. Romero
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When you start to feel the rotting of your mind
And it is the flesh that is consuming you.
When you begin to hear your heart beat out of step.
And it is your breathe that is ending you.
When you open your eyes and see the black.
And it is the day you do not see.
When you fall to the ground one last time.
And it is the earth you forever see.
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defender
10-21-2004, 02:59 PM
That.... that was beautiful.
I want to have your baby.
Sorry but 4 is enough for me.
pimp tyranny
10-21-2004, 03:03 PM
wow, condoms
ZeroSupporT
10-21-2004, 03:29 PM
Dark.
x0thedeadzone0x
10-21-2004, 03:37 PM
Very cool defender. I definitely support teh dark poetry. :twisted:
defender
10-21-2004, 03:41 PM
breath*
misspelling was intentional
http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=breathe
You may pronounce it how you feel but dictionary defintion was more appropriate as breathe. Breathe is a verb while breath is a noun. I sort of missused the word as a noun and I tend to do that sometimes and it is usually intentional as is this case.
Wshakspear
10-21-2004, 03:46 PM
Hey, its Poetry, your not the only one kicking the nads of the English language. Yours was a good use, others, not so much.
O-Dog
10-21-2004, 03:49 PM
Bravo...dare we ask the source of your inspiration? With 4 bastions of joy (plus the Mrs.) how can such darkness be fostered?
defender
10-21-2004, 06:46 PM
Bravo...dare we ask the source of your inspiration? With 4 bastions of joy (plus the Mrs.) how can such darkness be fostered?
Early morning blues..
I had a cup of coffee and feel better now.
:-)