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#1 Diesoft  

Posted 10 July 2021 - 09:19 AM

Hey, everyone. I wrote a short story for a contest called Doomsday over on vocal.media and I am happy how it turned out. The rules were that it had to be less than 2000 words, be about a post-apocalyptic dystopia, and feature a heart shaped locket.

 

https://vocal.media/...s/defiance-date

I would love to read any feedback or opinions on it. Thank you :)



#2 Tyler!   Raditz's #1 Disciple! CAGiversary!   140 Posts   Joined 3.4 Years Ago  

Posted 11 July 2021 - 10:55 AM

You get paid by the amount of time that it's viewed? I googled it and they really lowball the creators. No offense to you, I'm sure your story is good, I was just curious about what site that was.



#3 caggamers  

caggamers

Posted 17 July 2021 - 04:41 PM

I don't know if the posters in this section are real people or bots anymore.

#4 Diesoft  

Posted 22 July 2021 - 02:41 AM

You get paid by the amount of time that it's viewed? I googled it and they really lowball the creators. No offense to you, I'm sure your story is good, I was just curious about what site that was.

Yeah. It's a hell of a lowball but it was an attempt for a contest. I don't think anybody there is expecting to make much there but first time in a long time I wrote something that I published online.



#5 Diesoft  

Posted 22 July 2021 - 02:41 AM

I don't know if the posters in this section are real people or bots anymore.

Real this time. Is that a problem here? Too many bots? Ugh.



#6 PippaScott  

PippaScott

Posted 01 August 2021 - 08:24 PM

You have a great story, I really liked it. I think you have talent and you need to continue in the same spirit. I read with enthusiasm, this story, you know how to keep the reader. and you have your own style, I think you have a future as a writer. But there are also disadvantages, the site I did not like, it is a little simple and outdated. I don't think it will attract a large audience. I would advise you to take advantage of the best SEO website promotion to increase the flow of your audience, for example this company. I think this will help you in your career.



#7 Tyler!   Raditz's #1 Disciple! CAGiversary!   140 Posts   Joined 3.4 Years Ago  

Posted 15 August 2021 - 04:36 AM

Yeah. It's a hell of a lowball but it was an attempt for a contest. I don't think anybody there is expecting to make much there but first time in a long time I wrote something that I published online.

That's neat. If you're into short story telling/poems there's publishers out there that will put your work in books and stuff like that. Some friends of mine have gotten their short stories printed and it's out in the wild for everyone to enjoy haha. Every now and then I'll spend hours writing lyrics, but I just do it because they turn out to be mini autobiographies that rhyme.

I'm always throwing in cornball jokes just to make whoever sees it laugh... or cringe. Lol.

 

I don't know how that contest went for you, but it sounds like storytelling is somewhat of a hobby of yours and I think that is awesome, regardless if you won or not. I'd read what you wrote if you posted it here on CAG, or PM'd it to me. I got nothing but time lol.